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Critique Clinic – January 13-15, 2012

January 13, 2012

How does it work? For three days a week (Friday-Sunday midnight), I will open the clinic to any artist who wants an honest peer review and critique of a card which gets plenty of clicks but no sales, so something’s probably not quite right, or you’ve got a new design you want to test drive, or you’re unsure about the marketability of a card. Or perhaps you’re a newbie who isn’t sure if a recently submitted card is up to a marketable standard. Anyone is welcome to participate. In fact, I encourage everyone to at least look at the cards in question and read the critique comments – you may learn something. The purpose of the clinic is to help artists improve the commercial appeal and marketability of their cards.

THE RULES

  • ONE card per artist only.
  • Card must be for sale at Greeting Card Universe. HOWEVER, if you want advice on a card you intend to sell at GCU prior to uploading it, we will accept it, or if a card has been declined, we will accept it.
  • We will take an unlimited number of artists, including those who have submitted recently, HOWEVER I reserve the right to close a clinic for the day if the submissions become overwhelming. If the clinic has been closed, and you submit a card, your comment will be deleted.
  • To submit a card for critique, post a link to the card in the comments section of this clinic post.
  • Any artist is free to comment and/or give a critique of a submitted card. HOWEVER, post-and-run comments like “great card” or “you suck” will not be tolerated, nor will abuse. Criticism should be constructive, not destructive. Play nice or you will be banned.
  • I also won’t tolerate temper tantrums if you decide your “artistic integrity” is being stepped on because you asked for a critique, and someone told you the photo you’re using isn’t in focus. If you can’t take honest criticism, don’t submit. Once gets you a warning; twice and you’re banned from submitting in the future.
  • Artists who critique may do so by giving their opinion, posting an example of another card, or pointing the submitter to a video, on-line article, or other helpful suggestion.
  • Don’t forget that artists who are giving you tips and helpful advice are volunteering their time and trouble. Be nice. A link back to their store on your website or blog is appreciated (but not mandatory).
  • You are free not to take any advice offered. There’s no guarantee any card will be a bestseller, so don’t come into the clinic with unrealistic expectations.
  • Rules may change as we go along and we see how things turn out, okay?

So without any further ado, I declare this week’s Critique Clinic open!

26 Comments leave one →
  1. Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
    January 13, 2012 1:02 pm

    Happy Friday, I would like to submit this design for the clinic today. I made this as a gift for my niece and it has alot of clicks but no sales other than mine. Thanks.

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/birth-new-baby-announcements/boy/snips-and-snails-baby-boy-872578?aid=145102&f=1

    • Mindy Rosso's avatar
      January 13, 2012 8:30 pm

      Hi Betsy,
      My 2 cents for what it’s worth … First this is a darling design, one we are tickled to have on GCU.

      A few thoughts: At a glance I wasn’t quite sure what occasion the card is for … the stock photo is a bit wintery (scarf & holiday like colors) and the baby is a bit old or alert for an announcement. Maybe a different stock photo may work better … one less seasonal, more “newborn” like and one that may work better with your design colors. I realize this is a GCU provided stock photo but you can also provide one of your own if you have one that you think works better.

      Also maybe more text on the front like “Welcoming Benjamin” or the date of birth might make it more clear that it’s a birth announcement.

      Once you get your design to where you like it I’d suggest you create a similar one in landscape orientation. Sometimes shoppers already have their “best” photo and look for a design in that orientation. And of course in your “free time” a version for little girls (horizontal & landscape) sugar & spice would be great additions.

      If you’re open to trying something totally different think outside of the box or shall I say outside of the border. Big photos are in these days, the bigger the better. Think full bleed photos where the design overlays the photo. Maybe try something like that in the same spirit of your snail design. We have few to none of that style in the Baby Announcement category today. For example the concept of this Christmas card by Doreen:
      http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/shopping/zoom.asp?pid=849590&w=1&ref=details_large_view

      • Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
        January 13, 2012 8:59 pm

        Mindy, thanks for your reply. I am honored to have you offer your sage advice along with Corrie’s and Peggy’s.I had started a sugar and spice actually but I got involved in Christmas and now Valentine’s, there needs to be more time in a day to devote to this! I am putting my nose to the grindstone on this one and hope to have results soon. Thanks again.

  2. GCUAdmin's avatar
    January 13, 2012 1:11 pm

    Betsy, it’s a cute idea. I can see a room for improvement here.

    There’s hardly any contrast between the background color and the color of the snails. In addition, the outline around each snail is not consistent. The words going around the photo box aren’t properly aligned, and the composition kind of looks odd to my eye.

    You might try a different background color, maybe a subtle tone-on-tone pattern to let the snail graphics stand out a bit more.

    Corrie

  3. dogbreedz's avatar
    January 13, 2012 5:03 pm

    I like this, Betsy – adorable concept, and *almost* perfect! I personally like who the text is aligned – it fits for me with the teeny snail accents. However I don’t like the “that’s what little boys are made of” at the top. The text is not contrasty enough with the background and I think if it was easier to read, it would “fight” with the main body of the card. I’d leave that off all together – or add it inside above the announcement info. I’d likely also bring the customizable name text higher – high enough that if someone wanted to type in a full name (first middle last) then it would clear the snail accents. The snail bodies – I’d keep them the same color they are now, but add a bit of texture to just the body to help it pop JUST a bit from the background (but then, I’m on a texture kick, with my 366 Textures Blog Tutorial for 2012). I understand why you used two different outlines on that graphic too, but it pulls too much attention away from the center image for my liking. In my Artist Notes, I’d like add that the photo and the baby’s name are fully customizable by the shopper. What keywords do you have assigned to this image?

  4. Cathy Turner artfromtheheart's avatar
    Cathy Turner artfromtheheart permalink
    January 13, 2012 5:11 pm

    Hello fellow artist’s, I would like to submit card #891601 for your comment’s. I appreciate all comment’s.

    Thank you Cathy

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      January 13, 2012 5:59 pm

      The image and the text seem okay… I’m just not sure I make a connection between an illustration of a wolf with a birthday.

      Corrie

    • dogbreedz's avatar
      January 13, 2012 6:10 pm

      Do you have a link to the card? Thx!

      • Cathy Turner artfromtheheart's avatar
        Cathy Turner artfromtheheart permalink
        January 13, 2012 6:50 pm

        Hello dogbreedz,
        the link to card #891601 is Happy Birthday with a beautiful wolf, warm sun, and blue cloud’s. Cathy

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      January 13, 2012 11:59 pm

      Hi Cathy,

      I love the painting too and agree there are many ‘wolf lover’s” in the world who have birthdays 🙂 Here is a thought – If it were me, I would find a way to make my birthday text and message relate to wildlife or better yet wolves. It’s important to connect your imagery with the category and in this case you’ve failed to get that message through.

      Think of wolves, the sounds they make, how they live and come up with a clever birthday message that is ‘wolf related’.

      Once you have that perfect match of message with your painting, I would also consider making this card a bit more ‘masculine’ in my font choice. Women won’t mind a ‘sturdier’ text, but would most likely not choose this card for a man with your current choice which does really suit the strength of the subject.

      Doreen
      http://www.salonofart.com

  5. Cathy Turner artfromtheheart's avatar
    Cathy Turner artfromtheheart permalink
    January 13, 2012 7:00 pm

    Thank you for your comment Corrie,
    I received a lot of great feed back on the wolf painting. I had created my own home made Christmas greeting card’s with the wolf on the cover, my family and friend’s loved them so much. That was mainly the reason why I felt the wolf painting would make such a nice Birthday card. Cathy

    • Cathy Turner artfromtheheart's avatar
      Cathy Turner artfromtheheart permalink
      January 14, 2012 4:36 am

      Thank you,
      Doreen for your comment, I greatly appreciate your thought’s. That is a lesson about greeting card’s that I was quite unaware of. I thought all I needed to do was come up with an appealing picture and content, but now I will put a lot more thought into connecting with all, so that I can create the perfect greeting card. Brilliant comment’s, thank you
      Cathy

  6. Patty Cimlov-Zahares's avatar
    January 14, 2012 1:12 am

    Happy Friday-the-13th! I would like to submit this design for critique. It’s had 215 clicks since I uploaded it 3 months ago, but no buys. Too political?

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/get-well-feel-better-cards/general-get-well-feel-better/funny-get-well-vintage-dog-nurse-patient-greeting-card-880217?aid=183235

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      January 14, 2012 9:41 am

      I don’t know… maybe try an alternate wording without political ramifications, such as “Heard you’ve gone to the dogs… better get well soon!” or something like that. Love the image, btw.

      Corrie

    • dogbreedz's avatar
      January 14, 2012 4:02 pm

      Love it – almost! The only thing I would change is to get rid of the Cone Of Shame. Really, just that one little thing. I’d keep the inside text the way it is – customers can change that part. Nice concept!

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      January 14, 2012 4:43 pm

      Wow lots of different thoughts on this one 🙂 I think your wording is humorous and perfectly appropriate (for the states anyway). I also think the Cone of Shame is a big part of your image and would hate to see it go. I do think the cone is a bit big, but I’m guessing that isn’t stopping shoppers from buying it.

      Personally I think it may be the quality of the image that is keeping shoppers at bay. Your digital retouching is wonderful! But their is too much noise in the image. I realize it’s vintage, but the fact that it’s B/W combined with the era of the scene are enough to give a vintage feel. I would work on improving the quality of the image. Better contrast and remove the noise in picture.

      Brilliant idea!

    • Patty Cimlov-Zahares's avatar
      January 15, 2012 6:22 pm

      Thank you for all of your input. I appreciate it! I think I will do another version without the “Cone of Shame” and take a more friendlier, less political approach, giving buyers an option. As for the noise, the photo was already grainy and I did eliminate some noise (but didn’t want to soften it too much). As a matter of fact, I added a small amount of noise to the dog’s head for consistency and for that vintage look. Thanks again!

      ~Patty

  7. Donna Collins's avatar
    January 14, 2012 9:20 am

    Corrie, here’s a Valentine Card.. I seem to like simple sometimes… anyway I’m here again for some critiqueing…

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/valentines-day-cards/general-valentines-day/girl-with-bright-red-heart-892294?aid=156115

    Thanks,
    Donna Collins

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      January 14, 2012 9:39 am

      Seems okay to me, Donna. It’s ticked the boxes for Valentine’s Day.

      Corrie

      • Donna Collins's avatar
        January 14, 2012 9:57 am

        Corrie, what does ticked the boxes mean?

        Donna

      • GCUAdmin's avatar
        January 14, 2012 9:59 am

        That means it hits all the notes, it displays everything a Valentine’s Day card needs to – hearts, a romantic message, etc.

        Corrie

    • dogbreedz's avatar
      January 14, 2012 4:05 pm

      Wow, Donna! I love this card – very professional! All your cards that I saw were … wow! Nice … Like Corrie, I don’t see anything that would need changing …

      • Donna Collins's avatar
        January 14, 2012 6:24 pm

        Thanks Corrie, I love it when I learn something new, especially a new word….

        Donna

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