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Critique Clinic – November 11-13, 2011

November 11, 2011

How does it work? For three days a week (Friday-Sunday midnight), I will open the clinic to any artist who wants an honest peer review and critique of a card which gets plenty of clicks but no sales, so something’s probably not quite right, or you’ve got a new design you want to test drive, or you’re unsure about the marketability of a card. Or perhaps you’re a newbie who isn’t sure if a recently submitted card is up to a marketable standard. Anyone is welcome to participate. In fact, I encourage everyone to at least look at the cards in question and read the critique comments – you may learn something. The purpose of the clinic is to help artists improve the commercial appeal and marketability of their cards.

THE RULES

  • ONE card per artist only.
  • Card must be for sale at Greeting Card Universe.
  • We will take an unlimited number of artists, including those who have submitted recently, HOWEVER I reserve the right to close a clinic for the day if the submissions become overwhelming. If the clinic has been closed, and you submit a card, your comment will be deleted.
  • To submit a card for critique, post a link to the card at GCU in the comments section of this clinic post.
  • Any artist is free to comment and/or give a critique of a submitted card. HOWEVER, post-and-run comments like “great card” or “you suck” will not be tolerated, nor will abuse. Criticism should be constructive, not destructive. Play nice or you will be banned.
  • I also won’t tolerate temper tantrums if you decide your “artistic integrity” is being stepped on because you asked for a critique, and someone told you the photo you’re using isn’t in focus. If you can’t take honest criticism, don’t submit. Once gets you a warning; twice and you’re banned from submitting in the future.
  • Artists who critique may do so by giving their opinion, posting an example of another card, or pointing the submitter to a video, on-line article, or other helpful suggestion.
  • Don’t forget that artists who are giving you tips and helpful advice are volunteering their time and trouble. Be nice. A link back to their store on your website or blog is appreciated (but not mandatory).
  • You are free not to take any advice offered. There’s no guarantee any card will be a bestseller, so don’t come into the clinic with unrealistic expectations.
  • Rules may change as we go along and we see how things turn out, okay?

So without any further ado, I declare this week’s Critique Clinic open!

34 Comments leave one →
  1. Donna Collins's avatar
    November 11, 2011 4:32 pm

    O.K. not sure if I did this one, and you can see I always leave a lot of space around.. Is it o.k. to slant the font like I did? I kinda like to do that.

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/friendship-cards/general-friendship/two-girlfriends-having-a-soda-873654

    Thanks,
    Donna

  2. Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
    November 11, 2011 4:39 pm

    Hi Donna – I like what you did with the text. It’s a slight treatment which flows with the top lines of the ladies hair and it works for me. Corrie is the expert in this area, so heed her words over mind … hahaha!

    Just as a learning experience for others. What you’ve done with the text on this card is subtle and works within the balance of the overall card layout. When this doesn’t work is when artists use large fonts and tilt the text diagonally rather than slightly curving the text to flow with the design.

    Love the card Donna! Wish you much success!

    Doreen
    SalonOfArt.com

    • Donna Collins's avatar
      November 11, 2011 5:24 pm

      Awwwwww, thank you Doreen…It’s like getting a boost of artist energy when I receive a nice compliment. My smile is ear to ear…
      Thanks,
      Donna

  3. Nancy Hepner's avatar
    November 11, 2011 5:57 pm

    Hi, I’ve had 37 hits and only one sale on this card. How can I improve it? And, can you direct me where to learn contrast borders around letters so that it’s more readable?
    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/christmas-cards/seasons-greetings/dear-santa-ive-been-naughty-737636?aid=148078&f=1

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      November 11, 2011 6:17 pm

      It’s probably just me, but I don’t get the “humor” in the card. What I can say is that I find the green background rather acid in combination with the red font.

      If you’re looking for a tutorial, it will help if you let us know which graphics editing program you’re using – Paint Shop Pro, Photoshop, GIMP, to name a few.

      Correi

      • Nancy Hepner's avatar
        November 12, 2011 9:09 am

        Hi Correi,
        My girlfriend gave me this idea and I designed it last Christmas. The colors are chosen to be the brightest and still be in the range of red and green. I tried darker reds on paler greens but this combination seemed the most readable and cheerful of all I tried.

        I use WordArt, PowerPoint and GIMP for all my word graphics. Also, please direct me where I can get Christmas font downloads. Thanks ahead!

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      November 11, 2011 6:28 pm

      Hi Nancy – I’m not a fan of the shade of green (and I love green), it’s a shade that should be used sparingly and here it’s overpowering. I would tone it down. Secondly, I would make your text smaller and improve the spacing between the ‘lines’ of text. I feel like it’s screaming at me and I want to look away rather than enjoy the card.

      If you use Photoshop, you can play around with the Stroke feature which you’ll find under the Blending Options, but I caution you when using strokes to outline text, this can look really great if done well or just add clutter if over-used, so don’t over do it.

      Hope that helps!
      Doreen
      SalonOfArt.com

      • Nancy Hepner's avatar
        November 12, 2011 9:16 am

        Hi Doreen,

        I didn’t think of using just green and/or red on white at the time I designed this; being new to GCU.

        I will try your suggestions about font size as soon as I get a suitable Christmas font to replace this one, which only came in all caps.

        I’ve read that GIMP can do anything that Photoshop can do. So, as soon as I find a tutorial, I’ll try the Blending Options. 🙂

      • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
        November 12, 2011 3:54 pm

        Hi Nancy – it looks like a GIMP expert has come to your aide on the strokes question, thank you Betsy!

        For fonts – If you are going to use a “Christmas font” with some fun do-dads on it, then you are better off only using that font for the 1st letter. These are not good choices for small format items like greeting cards. It can look gaudy and illegible. Instead consider combining a font or two to emphasize your point.

        You can look for fonts at any of the online ‘Font Houses’ just be sure to grab only those which are FREE for commercial use.

        You may check out this post from the weekly Dash of Inspiration posts on this blog which might be helpful:

        Dash of Inspiration – September 19, 2011

        And if you have time, there are some Christmas posts with fonts and goodies in some of those old posts too as well as GIMP tutorials. Might be worth your time to go through all 29 weeks if you have not been watching it. I try to offer GIMP users tutorials and downloadable treats as frequently as I can both here and on my FB Fan Page.

        Good luck Nancy!

        http://www.SalonOfArt.com

    • Nancy Hepner's avatar
      November 13, 2011 9:15 pm

      Thank you all so very much for your fantastic information and advice!
      Learning the GIMP techniques and downloading Christmas fonts will take time, so for the purposes of this exercise I have simplified the card with what I already know and placed it in my private gallery.
      http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/christmas-cards/santa-claus-st-nicholas/general/greeting-card-880463?aid=148078
      Please advise me if it is good enough to replace my old ‘Naughty’ card or should I submit it on its own? Any hints would be greatly appreciated.
      With gratitude,
      –nh/Websprinter 🙂

  4. CindyJ's avatar
    November 12, 2011 2:16 am

    Hi Nancy,
    I’m not one to judge other people’s humor because my own sense of humor is really ‘off the wall’ sometimes (according to my son and others – lol), but since you mention the word “naughty” on the front of your card, it doesn’t really seem like the kind of card one family would send to another (per your inside text). But that’s just me. 🙂 Unless the entire family is naughty. Then it is pretty funny. lol.

    Cindy

    • Nancy Hepner's avatar
      November 12, 2011 9:36 am

      Hi Cindy,

      My girlfriend gave me this idea when I couldn’t think of anything last Christmas.

      Good point about changing the inside greeting. I could change it to, “Are you Naughty or Nice? Merry Christmas!”, or, “Are you on the Naughty List too?” or some such.

      • Nancy Hepner's avatar
        November 12, 2011 10:04 am

        Thank all of you Correi, Doreen and Cindy J! For your wonderful suggestions how to improve my card!

        If you can help me with download info for better Christmas fonts and a GIMP tutorial for Blending Options; I’ll redesign it!

        My next question is, how do I find your links to link back to your stores on my GCU website or blog? Would ‘favorite’-ing your cards or ‘Like’ -ing be adequate? Or do you have specific links you want me to post.

        Thanks again and I’ll post a link to the new card when I have the changes made. 🙂

        –nh

      • Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
        November 12, 2011 2:18 pm

        Nancy, you won’t find blending options in gimp. Look for script-fu,-layer effects,-stroke. It should be in your gimp already. I don’t remember because I added a more extensive script-fu awhile ago where I go for layer effects.
        Here is the link to the page where I got it. If you don’t know how to add brushes or plug ins to your gimp, just google it and you will find countless tutourials on how to do this, or for that matter anything you want to do.

        http://registry.gimp.org/node/97

        this plug in has some amazing effects you can do in gimp. Just be careful to save your work very often as some of the effects can use alot of memory while they are working and can make your computer stop responding.
        Hope you have luck with this.

  5. CindyJ's avatar
    November 12, 2011 2:19 am

    Here’s a ‘thank you’ card I created a while back. My sister ordered 10 of them, but otherwise, 37 clicks and no other sales.

    http://artist.greetingcarduniverse.com/thank-you-cards/for-the-gift/general/thanks-for-the-gift-rainbow-831125

    Thanks for any and all suggestions! 🙂
    Cindy

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      November 12, 2011 2:55 am

      Hi Cindy – 37 clicks and 10 sales (regardless of it being your sister) is very good for a thank you card. There are probably more thank you cards than any other card out there so the choices are mind boggling … LOL!

      The only thing I’ll comment on is that uneven borders on greeting cards don’t have a professional ‘finished touch’ to them. Using the two-thirds to one-third ratio works beautifully, but at least three of four sides should be evenly spaced from the edge of the card. This card has the top and bottom spaced smaller than the two sides. It causes a lack of balance. Otherwise the card is fine. I find the colors in your abstract to be a bit less vibrant than I think they should be, but that is probably just personal preference 🙂

      Good luck!
      Doreen

      • CindyJ's avatar
        November 12, 2011 3:36 am

        Thanks, Doreen! I have to admit that I didn’t even notice that I had created it like that. 😛 And even now I wouldn’t have noticed it had you not pointed it out to me. Lol. I’m sure I made this one back when I thought all cards had to have some sort of border on them (ha ha ha – glad I learned otherwise since then); or else I added the border after the fact realizing that my image wasn’t big enough to fill the card. One or the other. 🙂 Thanks for your wonderful observation, Doreen. 🙂

        Cindy

  6. Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
    November 12, 2011 5:11 pm

    Hi again Nancy, I am sorry I said you won’t find blending options in gimp. It is called blending mode once you get into the stroke effects. I hope I didn’t confuse! Trying to explain things while typing is not my strong suit!

  7. lisa's avatar
    November 13, 2011 2:40 pm

    Hi

    Just posted a new design for a Gothic Christmas card. Originally the writing was in black but when I submitted it the reviewer noticed Seasons should have been Season’s. When I changed it I used the red print colour I normally put on the black version of the card. I think it may look slightly more festive this way.. I haven’t explained this well at all but a Birthday Version uses the black print on white here

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/gothic-emo-alternative-birthday-cards/spiders-roses-and-skull-birthday-876091?aid=139472

    with the festive seasons greeting version here

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/christmas-cards/gothic-emo-alternative/greeting-card-876082?aid=139472

    Should i bother re editing it back to a black text or does the red look ok? (basically I forgot when I edited it that originally I had it the text black..)

    By the way what a cool idea for a critique clinic! Usually I have depended on kids/visitors/etc for advice and I think they are getting slightly fed up of me saying hey does this look ok, where should I put this dragon, etc.

    thanks

    Lisa

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      November 13, 2011 2:44 pm

      I think with the festive card, you’ve go ta lot of red going on in the design, but not a lot of black for a Gothic card. If you change the text to black, it might make the design look a little more balanced color-wise. Not to say it doesn’t look great in red. 🙂

      Corrie

    • Doreen Erhardt's avatar
      November 13, 2011 4:06 pm

      I like it both ways, so I defer to Corrie’s opinion on the text color. I would like to mention that I would not have Season’s Greetings on the inside when it’s already on the outside. It reads better without the double Season’s Greetings.

      Happy Sales!
      Doreen

      • lisa's avatar
        November 14, 2011 4:44 pm

        Thanks for the advice 🙂 I agree I think it looks better with black text instead of the red on the white card but I am wondering though if I make the changes will I have to resubmit the card for review?

        It can take a long time..

        Or can I just swap in the new pic then change the texts on the cards to perhaps something like wishing you all the best for the hoidays or something. In cards I do for zazzle and cafepress I tend to leave them blank or put a picture in..

        Thank you

        Lisa

      • GCUAdmin's avatar
        November 14, 2011 4:50 pm

        You should be able to change the image in Manage Cards without a new review.

        Corrie

      • Lisa Konrad's avatar
        November 15, 2011 2:26 pm

        I have changed the front image

        http://artist.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/christmas-cards/gothic-emo-alternative/greeting-card-876082?aid=139472

        and I do think it looks a lot more balanced with the black instead of the red.

        I am a bit stumped on what to say on the inside though. I need something that implies the non specifics of Season’s Greetings without it actually saying Season’s greetings.. Wondering if to just put inside Happy New Year? I think putting Wishing you a Merry Christmas is just a bit jarring..

        Lisa

      • GCUAdmin's avatar
        November 15, 2011 2:40 pm

        How about Happy Holidays? or Wishing you happy holidays, which seems pretty generic to me.

        Corrie

      • Doreen Erhardt's avatar
        November 15, 2011 4:43 pm

        Lisa, in my opinion your message is complete when the front says:

        Season’s Greetings and inside: and best wishes for the New Year

        Rather than Season’s Greeting Season’s Greetings and best …. Remember the recipient reads the front of a card and then opens the inside for the ‘rest of the story’.

        If it were me, I would play on the Gothic theme on the inside, since that is your audience. Just a thought.

    • lisa's avatar
      November 15, 2011 5:02 pm

      I see what you mean Doreen and have changed it to “and best wishes” it does read better that way.. unless of course I suddenly come up with something more Gothic to say 🙂

      Thank you for the advice and now to find some Goths and push them to the site 🙂

      Lisa

  8. Megan J's avatar
    November 13, 2011 5:24 pm

    Hi! This is my first card at the clinic, and it hasn’t been approved yet, this is in my private gallery. Since I’m new to card making, I welcome any feedback! 🙂

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/greeting-card-880205/?aid=183807

    This card is for the winter holiday season (particularly intended for Yule, but I wanted it to be open to any any of the holidays).

    Thanks!!
    MJ

    P.S I’ve tried several times to post here, but haven’t been able to I don’t think. However, if this is a duplicate, please ignore or delete. Thanks. 🙂

  9. Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
    November 13, 2011 6:43 pm

    Hi Megan, I like the idea you are going for with this image however I think there is too much going on. I find it hard to focus on any one thing. I think there are too many shadows and I am not sure about the different fonts with their different colors. Maybe if you cropped it a bit to get rid of the dark corner of the room, then lighted up the remaining dark shadows to let the brightness of the flowers speak to your sentiment. I look forward to seeing your shop. Welcome and best of luck to you.
    Betsy

    • Megan J's avatar
      November 14, 2011 1:50 am

      Thanks, Betsy! I will definitely try to make it more cheerful and see if I can give it some focus, and I will keep that in mind in my future designs. I appreciate your feedback. 🙂

  10. Terry Shoemaker's avatar
    November 18, 2011 11:53 am

    I tried to get a head start on some cards and started with Valentines Day photo cards.

    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/collections/photo-cards-your-picture-here/valentines-day/valentines-day-photo-card-cupid-879190?aid=151326

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      November 18, 2011 2:49 pm

      Looking at your card, Terry, I’m a little confused by the mix of illustration and what appears to be a photo of a flower arrangement. And I must also confess I find the design quite hard on the eye, almost harsh rather than soft and romantic.

      Corrie

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