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Critique Clinic – February 3-5, 2012

February 3, 2012

How does it work? For three days a week (Friday-Sunday midnight), I will open the clinic to any artist who wants an honest peer review and critique of a card which gets plenty of clicks but no sales, so something’s probably not quite right, or you’ve got a new design you want to test drive, or you’re unsure about the marketability of a card. Or perhaps you’re a newbie who isn’t sure if a recently submitted card is up to a marketable standard. Anyone is welcome to participate. In fact, I encourage everyone to at least look at the cards in question and read the critique comments – you may learn something. The purpose of the clinic is to help artists improve the commercial appeal and marketability of their cards.

THE RULES

  • ONE card per artist only.
  • Card must be for sale at Greeting Card Universe.
  • We will take an unlimited number of artists, including those who have submitted recently, HOWEVER I reserve the right to close a clinic for the day if the submissions become overwhelming. If the clinic has been closed, and you submit a card, your comment will be deleted.
  • To submit a card for critique, post a link to the card at GCU in the comments section of this clinic post. Allowances will be made if you’ve had a card declined, or made a new design you’d like advice on. Give us the link where we can see the card, such as your private gallery, Flickr, etc.
  • Any artist is free to comment and/or give a critique of a submitted card. HOWEVER, post-and-run comments like “great card” or “you suck” will not be tolerated, nor will abuse. Criticism should be constructive, not destructive. Play nice or you will be banned.
  • I also won’t tolerate temper tantrums if you decide your “artistic integrity” is being stepped on because you asked for a critique, and someone told you the photo you’re using isn’t in focus. If you can’t take honest criticism, don’t submit. Once gets you a warning; twice and you’re banned from submitting in the future.
  • Artists who critique may do so by giving their opinion, posting an example of another card, or pointing the submitter to a video, on-line article, or other helpful suggestion.
  • Don’t forget that artists who are giving you tips and helpful advice are volunteering their time and trouble. Be nice. A link back to their store on your website or blog is appreciated (but not mandatory).
  • You are free not to take any advice offered. There’s no guarantee any card will be a bestseller, so don’t come into the clinic with unrealistic expectations.
  • Rules may change as we go along and we see how things turn out, okay?

So without any further ado, I declare this week’s Critique Clinic open!

18 Comments leave one →
  1. Gerda with Send2smiles's avatar
    February 3, 2012 6:21 pm

    Wooops? I guess I am first. I created this card with the racoon a while ago but it never sold. I think I covered the ages 1 to 10. Maybe the wording is a little bit to clunky? Any help is appreciated. Thank you and have a nice weekend. Gerda
    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/4th-birthday-cards/you-are-4-4-birthday-839947

    • dogbreedz's avatar
      February 3, 2012 6:59 pm

      Gerda, your card is adorable!! I’ll be curious to see what the more experienced folks have to input for you. The only thing that “bothers” me about the card is the harsh clunky border – it feels in direct competition with the light, airy fun feel of the rest of the card. That raccoon is fun!!

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      February 3, 2012 7:42 pm

      Hi Gerda,
      How adorable! I do think the border could go away and ‘lighten’ the feeling of the card a bit. Also, if it were my card I would say on the front something like “Hip, hip, hooray look who turned 4 today!”
      Then keep the inside simple such as; “Wishing you a day filled with bubbles, fun & cake!”

      All in all, in my opinion there is nothing ‘wrong’ with your design. Removing the distraction of the border, increasing the size of your design a wee bit and tying a message truly suited for children under 10 may improve your sales. Remember kids loves rhymes!

  2. Dragonfire Graphics's avatar
    February 3, 2012 6:58 pm

    Hi Gerda, I think this is a cute image. My only thought is that I would love to see your adorable raccoon a bit bigger. He seems to get lost among the bubbles and is overpowered by the border. As for your wording, I think it is fun for a 4 year old. Happy Friday to you.

  3. John H. Johnson's avatar
    February 3, 2012 10:46 pm

    I haven’t been around for awhile. Hope all are doing well! This is one I added a while back. Just curious what everyone thinks about it’s humor and the image. Thanks for any and all critique!!
    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/getting-older-birthday-cards/birthday-aliens-get-older-854427?aid=138159
    Thanks, John (The Village Greetings)

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      February 4, 2012 7:30 am

      John, the illustration is very cute and I like the humor. Maybe you’re having trouble being seen among the other cards in the category?

      Corrie

      • John H. Johnson's avatar
        February 5, 2012 5:38 am

        Thanks Corrie! There are a lot of cards in the catagory. Hopefully the right customer will see it and I will get that first sale! 🙂 I just wanted to let everyone here know that the Critique Clinic really does work! I submitted a valentine card with hearts on it a while back that had not sold any yet. I took all the great advise I got here and made some changes to the card. I brightened the illustration up and took some of the black out of it. I made a slight change to the inside verse and made some changes to they key words, and I have sold three so far! Just wanted to thank everyone that takes the time to help others here! 🙂
        Thanks, John

  4. Gerda with Send2smiles's avatar
    February 3, 2012 10:58 pm

    Thank you everyone. I really appreciate your time, helpful thougths and encouraging words. This is how I changed the card now. I do like it much better – I hope you do, too.
    Thanks again and have a wonderful weekend.

    Gerda
    http://artist.greetingcarduniverse.com/4th-birthday-cards/greeting-card-839947

  5. CindyJ's avatar
    February 5, 2012 7:32 pm

    I apologize for not getting my card submitted earlier, I’ve been swamped. Anyhow, I created this ‘motorcycle mama’ recently and was wondering if her hair line (not the hair, itself which is supposed to be wild-looking to match the inside verse that refers to ‘wild’) is problematic because the hair is kind of thin where the forehead shows through. It was an awful experience for me to get that card completed because the hair (thousands of individual strands) made it a file that was more than 50MB (yes, MegaBytes!) and it kept crashing my computer. So if it’s not TOO noticeable, wonderful, then I won’t have to work on it any more. I had a copy printed, and it doesn’t look too bad, but I just wondered your opinions, and if there’s anything else that pops out at you that’s problematic with it.
    http://www.greetingcarduniverse.com/holiday-cards/valentines-day-cards/humor/greeting-card-896386?aid=152495&f=1

    Thanks! 🙂
    Cindy

    • GCUAdmin's avatar
      February 5, 2012 8:04 pm

      To be honest, Cindy, I can see the outline of the top of her head through the hair, it’s pretty clear, and kind of like looking at an egg. It’s a cute idea. You may have shot yourself in the foot with the individual strands of hair. Do you have a solid hair shape you could adapt? That would probably work better.

      Corrie

      • CindyJ's avatar
        February 5, 2012 8:20 pm

        That’s what I feared. 😦 As a matter of fact, I did make a different head-full of hair yesterday for my daily challenge that was tons easier to create (it’s on my blog – ilovecuttables.blogspot.com). Do you think it will suffice, or do you think I need to do more work on it? Thanks for responding, Corrie, and also, congrats on your DotD yesterday!!! 🙂 And Doreen, if you pop over here, congrats on YOUR DotD win, today!!! 🙂

        Cindy

    • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
      February 5, 2012 8:25 pm

      Sadly, I agree with Corrie. Now, if this was created in Photoshop, there are a few things you can do, but if this is a flat file with the hair and head being on the same layer, then I fear your only choice to fix it, should you chose to do so, is to keep drawing hair to thicken that forehead area.

      It’s a delightful idea and very well done with that one exception.

      • CindyJ's avatar
        February 5, 2012 8:32 pm

        Hi Doreen, it was created in Inkscape, but I think the hair strands are all on one layer. I’m only slowly learning how to deal with layers in Inkscape, and I don’t think anything in that ‘motorcycle mama’ file is on separate layers (although layers are certainly available in Inkscape). Can you make the general suggestions (don’t worry about going into detail) that you would have made if I were using Photoshop and I’ll see if I can do anything similar in Inkscape? 🙂

        Thanks!
        Cindy

      • Doreen/Salon of Art's avatar
        February 5, 2012 10:58 pm

        Hi Cindy – Okay well . . .

        1) If the hair strands were on a different layer than the head, I would either mask the forehead and reduce it’s opacity or erase it to see if that gave a more ‘natural’ look – i.e., leave less forehead to show through the hair.

        2) Or, I would mask and copy those forehead strands of hair. Flip them and change the orientation of them over the top of what is there – repeating this until I had ‘filled’ in the area with more strands.

        3) Or, I would use my cloning tool and attempt to clone some of the hairs over the forehead to fill it in.

        I don’t know that any of these methods will help you if this has not been created in layers 😦 I imagine you are inspired now to learn how to use layers in Inkscape though . . . LOL!

  6. CindyJ's avatar
    February 6, 2012 2:23 am

    Thanks, Doreen! Yes I’m definitely inspired to learn more about layers! As a matter of fact, I was already on track to do just that! My daily ‘face’ today on my blog (President Obama) in the ’29Faces’ challenge utilized layers from start to finish. Using layers still confuses me some, but I think I’ll eventually get the hang of them. 🙂 I’ve never done masking in Inkscape, so that might be a whole ‘nother ball of wax, but I’ll give it a go. 🙂

    Thanks again Doreen! 🙂
    Cindy

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